Commentary Writing #1

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  1. UnknownNovember 3, 2017 at 11:44 AM

    I liked your transition words and you had good describing words as well. Good job I really liked it!

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  2. Amanda-Z-blogNovember 3, 2017 at 12:05 PM

    You supported your opinion very well with facts and quotes. You didn't sugarcoat anything, which was great. You are missing commas in a few places, but did a good job overall.

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